Fan Story: Pirates

THAT WAS SWEET!   

keep writing.   

oh yay ^^ It is liked! Wait, this means i will have to write more... omg...more work. *sigh* Whenever im not busy, ill see if i can finish it off. Im gonna need to think of something though... maybe ill write about the pirates boarding the ship, and looting it, but one of the crewmembers saves the day... no wait, he can die aswell!! lol... ill c wot i can do

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very good, now give me a motivation for the pirates besides being evil.

hmm... thats a tricky one. i havnt actually played the game, so... yeh. whatever their motivation is ingame, its the same here. nd if they dont have one...hmm...it could be that they want the cargo? money? They have a grudge? The captain was pissed that day because his wife didn't buy the brand of beer that he likes most? i dont know, all i know is that there needs to b ppls, conflict, then a resolution, which didnt end too well for the glorias crew. You could save me the trouble and write a little back story for this, i sure as hell cant be bothered...my head still hurts. and why isnt being evil enough motivation? given the oppurtunity, ide do the same just to watch the ship blow up.

theyre not evil, merely greedy selfish little buggers!

well yeah, isnt that good enuff? and they are pirates, they dont need a motive.

Motive = BOOTY, err, um, Bounty.

simple.

They are pirates, after all.

i agree... anyway, ive noticed noones really cared about my story.....omfg it took so much effort to write...and barely anyone notices.....im sad now

since this is currently the only active fan fic story line i am hijacking it for my Advent story line.
anyway here is my story. If you all like it i will right more


The TEC defenses at Tal were woefully weak. As rank after rank of the Advent fleet jumped out of Phase Space and clouds of fighter exited the carriers to provide a screen for the capital ships and frigates, the feeble remnants of the TEC fleet were already expanding clouds of debris. High Commander Salator ordered that a sample of the life on Tal be taken and all major political figures were to be taken on bourd of the Coming Darkness, his flagship. To weeks later after the computer banks of Tal had been analyzed and copies dispatched to their home world Salator ordered the world destroyed. As he watched the antimatter explosions blossom across the landscape like deadly flowers he smiled. The Return had begun.
"My Lord", said a Lesser Psion, "There are multiple Phase Lanes leading out from this
world, the lanes are long enough that we cannot scout the Lanes within a reasonable
amount of time."
"Damn." said High Commander Salator. "I cannot allow the the High Mindlords to discover that the Return has stalled after our first battle. The prisoners still refuse to talk?"
"Yes, my Lord."
"Damn, alright tell Farala and the other Flayers that they have my authorization to use, rigorous, techniques on the prisoners."
"Yes my Lord." the Lesser Psion's face was completly expresionless, as befited one of his rank, only the lower ranks and castes, imperfects(cripples) and headblinds(those who had no Psionic talent) showed their opinions on their faces.
"Sir", it was Salator's friend, High Psion Dorsain, " Do you think it wise to give that sadist Farala free rein?"
"I will remind you that however much the High Mindlords may object, however much I may object to torture, both the High Mindlords and I object far more to the Return stalling. I would die far quicker and far easier if I shot myself in the Head with a plasma rifle than to fail with the Return."
"I understand my Lord, partly I am worried what they will do to our personal if we torture theirs, and what if that world that you so casually annilated was not a Military world but a Civilianone."
"High Psion, only fools would put a Military world this close to the edge of what they believe to be unexplored space."
"Perhaps it was partaly Military, partially Civilian."
"What fool would not separate the types of worlds so as to achieve maximum efficiency, return to your post, High Psion."
"Yes my Lord." Dorsain bowed his head in acquiescence and walked back to his duty station.

Several hours later Salator recieved information on the systems that were the endpoints of the Phase Lanes through his Mindlink( a small crystal embedded in his temple). One of the systems was highly populated and was the administration center for the others in the surrounding area. Four hours later all that was left in the Tal system was the spinning hulks of the Cobalts and the flash frozen remains of the prisoners. Several hours later the seconded element of the Return arrived and begun to construct defensive platforms and crystal mines.

Sheesh, go make your own thread

BTW, online the standard is to not indent new paragraphs, but rather to place a double return between them -- I'm going to guess that because of the "infinite paper size" of a computer screen, the additional real estate is used to increase clarity for "free", whereas double-spacing between paragraphs on a physical document would increase the cost of production noticeably -- not as noticeably as when the rules were "released", true, but noticeably still.

I really enjoy reading the story GalacticaCAG!   please keep writting  

question... where are the sheilds??? seems curious for missile barrages to hit without passing through the shields...

Duh, they didnt have shields back then, I am guessing this is back before any serious protection was needed.

yah plus this is a merchi so they prob wouldnt have high class armor or shields

ah yes, they're drifting through obviously dangerous space and they dont need the protection...

who's windows crack because of some low-grade missiles anyway?

they wouldnt have made the run if they hadnt... one would assume

but I'm nitpicky, dont force me to point out all of the cosmetic flaws. I liked it for the most part.

hmm...thats a hard one. lets just say that it had enough armour to withstand micro meteor impacts, and as for the larger ones, could just alter course. It did not, however, have military grade armour, so it could not possibly prevail against torpedoes. These things tend to be overlooked, i didnt even notice that flaw when i wrote this. another plausable theory is that the pirates were carrying special torpedoes. as said in the story, there was a slight pause between impact and explosion. this could mean that the torpedoes had hit, and then penetrated further into the ship, before exploding. like a massive drill or something on the front of it. And as for the story writing....well thats it. thats the story of the gloria and her crew...its finished now. i could continue it in the form of someone finding it, then leading a search for the pirates or something...but its sorta done. i could always start a new story, point of view from a capship captain and all...but seeing as i dont have the game yet, i dont have enough information about combat ect. now ive got three options. i write a reasonable story now, with many deficiantcies in the lore....or i could wait till i have the game, so i can write a more accurate story...or i could not bother. personally id like to write another story, its just that storys come naturally to me, i cant just start writing coz i want to. i can only write when it 'feels' right. cant explain it too well, ur just gonna have to take my word for it i will try though...

I know what you mean for the feels right bit

also in the past merchies have carried very light or nonexistent weapons and armor. usally reling more on speed and luk to avoid the occasional pirate raid

The lore is meant to be mear guidelines. I say let your immagination fill in the wholes of what you dont know.

yeah... well they were hoping that the interferance from the asteroids would mask them from any pirates...but looks like it didnt do much.

sounds comforting...might make my next story easier to write.

hey, just for info, what ships do the pirates use? could someone plz write down the classes and their purposes, so i can write about the TEC battle with them. if they just use stolen ships, eg. exactly the same as TEC, dont bother, but if they have diff ships, can someone help out plz?

they are the TEC ships, but without shields, iunno about hull/armor/dmg differences, but they look PWNTASTIC!!!

The assualt into the Taklidan system took barely four hours. As the first wave of frigates Phased into the system, three merchant vessals were about to leave through the same Phase Gate. Beams lept out from the frigates and two of the merchants evaperated in clouds of debris. The third, trailing atmosphere and bodies managed to evade the frigates as they spread out in system. As soon as the frigates had moved away from the Phase Gates a carrier Phased in, disgorged a mass of fighters and bombers. Behind that three capital ships entered the system. The frigates had cleared most of the space ajacent to the Phase Gate when the cap ships entered system with Salator's Mindblade in the lead. The Advent forces swept through the system with light resistence, the few Gauss Cannons defending the planet were causully blotted away and the reasearch labs died soon afterword. After the fighting in space was over High Commander Salator sent a broadcast down to the planet demanding their unconditional surrinder.
"My Lord, the so called TEC," the Lesser Psion invested the word "TEC" with sarcasm, "have rejected your generous offer and continue to offer resistence. Their message was starteling in its...crudity."
"Thankyou, you may go," said Salator. Then, turning to his communication's officer, he said, "Order the Mindblade, the Exile, and the Lost One to begin bombardment of the planet."
"Any particular location sir? Or a general bombardment."
"Yes I do have a particular location in mind, I think this planet's capitol should do nicely."
"Yes my Lord."
Salator watched as the puffs of smoke, so benign from space, blossemed on the planet's surface. The puffs of smoke that looked so harmless from space marked the location of a massive holocaust, a holocaust that was centered on the main population center of the planet.
"Sir", said the communications officer, "the planet is hailing us again."
"Put them through to my Mindlink."
"Yes Sir."
"We were discussing unconditional surrinder before you so rudely terminated the link, do you have anything more to add to conversation?" said Salator to the TEC representitive.
"You BASTERDS! How could you do this?! You've murdered millions of people!"
"If all you have contacted me for is to swear........." Salator let the sentence trail off into ominous silence.
"No, as much as I would like to, I have a duty to the people who are dieing down here. You have our surrender."
"Unconditionally?"
"Unconditionally."
"I will be sending a shuttle down for you at 1300 local time to Casatejal mountain, can you be their by then?"
"Yes" defeat filled the man's voice.
Salator hated himself in that moment with a passion that surprised him, but he had his orders and little things like absolutly destroying a man could not interfere. His thoughts wandered to again to the unwelcome idea that the city he had just annialatted could be Civilian, but no it was impossible. Still, the thought troubled his mind.